05-03-2011, 02:50 PM | #1 |
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One of my poems
This is quite a controversial poem.
How Much Love? How much love? No love at all I don't know you I can't love you How much love? I do this for love The love of my child No red light Dark, cold street corner How much love? You don't know love Self gratification is not love love is degradation what I have to do How much love? Love is why The risk I take Love is food on a plate My child is love You have no love for me
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Very good...
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05-03-2011, 08:20 PM | #3 |
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an excellent poem
it bought a tear to my eye |
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LOVELY!!
thank you for sharing.
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Very moving...
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It's good to get feedback on one of my bits of writing. I normally keep them to myself. Thanks for the positive comments.
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I just have one word Excellent!
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Very good, you have talent
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Thanks. I like to try and look at the other side of "social problems" from the side of the so called problem. People are so quick to judge someone on the street for instance, I try and look from the person and see why they do what they do. Not everything is black and white.
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09-03-2011, 05:20 PM | #10 |
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As someone who likes to write poetry myself, although I do mainly humorous throwaway poems, I thought that was really, really good!
If you don't already then I think you should send some of your work to poetry websites because people would really appreciate them! |
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