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Old 05-03-2011, 02:50 PM   #1
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Default One of my poems

This is quite a controversial poem.

How Much Love?

How much love?
No love at all
I don't know you
I can't love you

How much love?
I do this for love
The love of my child
No red light
Dark, cold street corner

How much love?
You don't know love
Self gratification is not love
love is degradation
what I have to do

How much love?
Love is why
The risk I take
Love is food on a plate
My child is love
You have no love for me
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Old 05-03-2011, 03:40 PM   #2
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Very good...
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Old 05-03-2011, 08:20 PM   #3
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an excellent poem

it bought a tear to my eye
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Old 05-03-2011, 08:22 PM   #4
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LOVELY!!
thank you for sharing.
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Old 05-03-2011, 08:34 PM   #5
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Very moving...
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Old 06-03-2011, 01:17 AM   #6
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It's good to get feedback on one of my bits of writing. I normally keep them to myself. Thanks for the positive comments.
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I just have one word Excellent!

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Very good, you have talent
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Old 06-03-2011, 01:11 PM   #9
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Thanks. I like to try and look at the other side of "social problems" from the side of the so called problem. People are so quick to judge someone on the street for instance, I try and look from the person and see why they do what they do. Not everything is black and white.
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As someone who likes to write poetry myself, although I do mainly humorous throwaway poems, I thought that was really, really good!
If you don't already then I think you should send some of your work to poetry websites because people would really appreciate them!
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